Tuesday, March 26, 2013

Revision Notes On My Draft English 112




Revision of My Draft By Me
            My thesis statement was “I believe the majority of the U.S. would consider this speech powerful and agree that it has changed the present and the future.” To improve my thesis statement I could mention some reasons why it is powerful. Reasons like the rhetorical appeals, and techniques. For example, “The rhetorical appeals, ad techniques, would lead the world to agree that the speech is powerful and has changed present and future.” I shared a lot of biography because it was a last minute thing. I don’t recall myself wandering off topic. I stayed on two subjects, Patrick Henry and his speech. I also did not use the writing process, which is prewriting, drafting and more. I think if I apply these changes to my analysis I should be better off.

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